Here is a small part of my book..The Voices Within. I hope you enjoy it. This is a rough draft so please feel free to critque it..good or bad..as that will help me.

Chapter two: The whispering Voices

Near the end of 11th grade I was spiraling out of control. Life at home was at its worst. Dad's yelling and my anger clashed daily. I didn't care whether I lived or died. Friday and Saturday nights I'd be out partying, coming home drunk and wasted.

    School was a horrid mess. I was getting high everyday. My grades were bad, my attendance was poor. Yet no one cared, I was hiding in plain sight.

    April 4,1980 a "friend" and I devised a plan to stay out all night. He told his folks that he was going to stay at my house and I told mine that I was going to stay at his house. The truth was we were going to Owego and sleep in a church that my friend knew about....what a brilliant plan!

    A friend of ours gave us a ride to Owego. We went to the game room to play some Foosball, pool and maybe score some drugs.

    We met this girl that wanted to party with us. We all hopped in the car and drove around. I was in the front passenger seat, the girl was in the backseat between two other guys. I was kissing her, which seemed like hours, the guys in the back were all over her.

    We stopped on a road (I had no idea where we were) because the the girl and to pee. Her and I went over the bank into the woods. There were pricker bushes everywhere. My mind was in a fog like haze. Somehow, she was on the ground. The guys were calling for us to hurry up. When I looked up to the road, everything was enveloped in an eerie white glow (like the glow around lights after swimming in a pool).

    When we got back into the car, I heard a deep, soothing, kind male voice, like kind a caring father should have. The voice wasn't from anyone in the car, it was INSIDE OF ME. A cold chill ran through my body. The voice told me that I was now a man for having sex the girl. He laughed, a haughty, evil laugh. I wasn't scared of the voice because he reassured me that all is well.

  Once we got back to the game room we dropped the girl off. My friend decided that he didn't want to spend the night in the church. I was so messed up that I didn't care. On the way back to Candor, the driver  said he couldn't take me all the way home. I had to hitchhike. Just outside the village, a man in a pickup truck gave me a ride. There was another boy in the truck. The driver asked if I was messed up, I said yes. The dashboard lights were surrounded by the same eerie white glow I saw in the woods. The voice was telling me I was gonna be in trouble for staying out so late.

    The driver dropped me off at the bottom of my road. I thanked him for the ride. I am deathly afraid of the dark, this night was no exception. The walk up the road was extremely frightening. The voice laughed at my fear. He asked me what I was going to tell my folks. I didn't have a plan. He said that if I told anyone about him, he will kill me. It was about 3:30am when I finally made it home. I crawled into bed, my head swimming, my body swirling, my thoughts racing. I threw up, then passed out.